L O N E S T A R

I retracted immediately from the running-almost stampeding-troop. I don't think anybody realized, I was going back to Gump. Had to deliver the important message to the most innocent person I had ever met.

Gump was still there, holding the grenade in his hand. He wasn't frightened, rather seem upset. I think he was sad to see how fast all the troops ran without even saying a word of goodbye to him. He raised his head in excitement as soon as he saw me.

"Gump, I am sorry that we have to leave you in this position. But you have been a good friend and I think you deserve to know a truth before parting."

Gump looked a little surprised. I continued,
"The reason you hadn't recieved any letter from your sweetheart was because we had been hiding them. You see, the love of her life, Edwin, who had dumped her previously..came back and they are gonna marry soon. She said she was sorry and claimed she never could develop any such feelings toward you. She will always see you as her best friend, her last word."

Gump, with his mouth wide open, kept staring at me..may be in disbelief, may be in surprise.

But I had to return back to the troop, the guy might let go of the grenade any time. I did say goodbye to him for the final time and start running West, faster than earlier.

I kept running, still thinking about Gump, how we all liked him, not for his naiveness..but most probably because his dis-association with anything corrupt. He told us had nothing to live for before he met us. When he got his love too, he was the richest person alive. We loved the kid, still we didn't consider him a friend. He was never an inner-circle.

Suddenly, in the midst of my run, I heard a loud sound, BANG!!!! It wasn't of a bomb explosion for sure, followed by a whistling fade. It sure came from Gump's direction though. I saw all the soldiers getting up and going back to check on Gump..

but I had a bad feeling in my stomach. Suddenly it became clear to me, without me witnessing what had just happened.
With slow pace I walked towards our Camp, where Gump had shot himself with his .22 caliber. The kid had nothing to live for again, his friends alienated him without a hint of farewell and his love had just deserted him. The world was worthless for the kid
who played the biggest prank of his life, he had the grenade on his left hand now.. a faulty one lablelled, 'Demo.', a small gun on his right.

It wasn't night yet, but I could swear I saw a shooting star..a pure lonestar falling off the sky, red with deceits.

THE END

wow

drew me to the edge......tyo nepali ma bhanchan ni....aang nai jiring jiring hune! maybe shyamalan could use some of your endings rather than his scooby doo pursuit ;)

lonestar gets four dazzling stars :)

adyopanta padhe...aayam naulo nabhaye pani euta antaraal pachhi purano jhalak dekhda ramro lagyo--- kahanima mukhya bhumikako jimma "I" charitra lai lekhakle parokshya ruple diye pani Gump lai diyeko bhram pratyakshya rupma kayam garna khojeko pakshya prati mero dhyan ramailo sanga aakrista bhayeko spasta parna chahanchhu. Prastutiko lagi lekhak lai dhanyabad.

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Now i know why they say words aint; enough in english language , nepali ma ni chaina hola , jusss to goood bro, lu deep bro sangai lekhak lai pani, hollywood tira posting gardinu paryo , dyamn was too good , at first i was picturing forest gump, but dyamn too good bro.

4 thumbs up ,2 hand 2 legs if i had some more thumbs tht would also go up :)

namai ta lekhak ma ni naam phernu parla eso ramo budhi ta aaucha ki hehehe

dyam....couldnt stop reading until i finished....
good one lekhak....hope it wasnt a true story though.....:o)

Lol, Deep. Some heavy-duty, Nepali GRE words there.

Oys, thanks for the review homie. One of these days, I want to write a short story in your and Deep's style. My style, it seems,is getting repititious.

Deep, I was very good in Nepali Vashik Shuddhata, but those sentences were hard even for me man. Gotta mellow it down a little comrade. Thanks for the good words and yeah, I think although the ending was different from my Previous ones, there seems to be some repiting theme on them. I will try to change the 'ayam' in new ones.

Shaq, traded to Miami and still remembers Hollywood. Thanks for the kind words brother.

Dananah, nanananah hey hey goodbye. Thanks for taking the time to go over it, it is a little lengthy. No, it ain't a true story. But 75th Infantry division's raid in France is a real one.

To those who read it thanks for going through a lengthy story.

Bastugat dristikonle niyalne ho bhane, *I* charitra ra Gump le kathalai paribhasit gareko dekhinchha. Gump lai nimitta ma rakhi I le kathabastulai niyantrit gareko chha. Nepathyama baseko I, Gump mrityu-dwarma asahaya ubhiyeko bela sakriya huna aauchha. Yad.dyapi lekhak ko balma I bhabuk byaktitwako paridhanma ubh.bhiyeko chha ta pani afno bhabuktako pratifal prati anabhigyar rup ma gyat dekhinchha I. Kaal sanga parajit hunai lageko Gumplai sakaratmak naitik samipyata bhanda badar lai bharyang bhane jasto aandhi chaleko manma baleko eutai batti I le bichalit matrai pardaina jhyappai nibhaidinchha pani. Atah: yamaraj nai ta nabhanau tara demo hand-grenade bokeko Gumplai dristigat garda yamadut samma bhanda atiyokti nahola I lai. Gump jiwanko antim pailo ma ubhiyeko aabhas paathakharuma kahaniko madhya tira nai nischit garidiyera usalai mareko huda Gumpko mrityuma euta paathak ko haisiyatle maile bhane chahe jati jhaskine wa bishesh dukhi hune mauka bata banchit rahana paryo. Je hos, I le Gumpko aadma jasari kathalai niyantrit garyo tyo sukshma bhaikana prabhabsil lagyo. Lekhaklai sadhbadka nadiyi rahan sakdina.

Deep, good analysis.
This time I wanted to give away the part that the protagonist is going to die eventually(although he didn't wanted to actually die in the first place), but I also gave away the twist in the beginning sentence of the story.
Your analysis is better than the story dude. Thanks.

kasam yaar deep bro le k lekhe ko testo , tyo nepali book ko kabita haru pachi hunthyo ni kabi ko barema ani kabita o barema, baba deep bro mane timlai dhut , tara honesly sabai ta bujhina hai kya heavy heavy word haru yaar..... esai ta sajha ma ek sa ek english lekhne chan jahile dictinoary lera basnu parcha, nepali dictionary ta chaina hain ehehheheeh it was awesome tho bujhe ni pheri sab , bhai le kehi na bujhi bhanyo bhan la, lu ta aba eso sitan sanga halka twacha launa gae ma

shaq bro..or lekhak could u all ppls translate what deep bro is saying...hehe

i never made past the 1st sentence...i didnt even think it was nepali :oP...but curious to know..cos lekhak says he did a good analysis ;o)...

so hehe if u can do it...but i aint expecting any so hehe..deep bro alik english pani dladeu nah...timro postings haru mah ;o)..

Hey hey Lekhak!

And what timely writing to ward off summer jetlag blues! I look forward to more stories from you.

Dananah, I brought a "English to Nepali to English" dictionary for the sole purpose of decoding Deep's and Nepe's Nepali. Wanna borrow it?! :P

Hey Lekhak bro,
Wow wow, first of all I am happy to see you back. In addition to that, the story is absolutely marvelous and thrilling as well.

Oys, are you back to east?

Shaq brother, if I could translate Deep's message for you, wouldn't I be able to write stories like him?
Deep, you will get a good revenge for twisting our minds. I will come up with more Nepali words next time you write a story.

STAR!! back in the States, eh? Hopefully the trip was great. I am sure you will be telling a lot of stories about Nepal to the kids at your school. Thanks for passing by.

Rusty, how the heck are you!! It has been a while since we have talked about Knicks. Thanks for going through.

*Deep, you will get a good revenge for twisting our minds. I will come up with more Nepali words next time you write a story.*

Lekhak,
Mastiskako oorja sochaiko mulya ra paridhile paribhasit hunchha bhanchhan. Klistatalai pariskarko upaj manne ho bhane man-mastiskako dwandalai apariharya kasari namanne? Simita.tako changulma kaid pareka kehi sabdaharuka atirikta pratidin khiyako samrajyama dhaldai gayeka anaginti sabdaharu madhhe bata kehi lai ta udh.dhar garna paune aashama Lekhakle mero agami katha lai pariskrit Nepali sabdasuman le sambodhan garne nyano chunauti lai maile saharsa swikareko chhu. Smaran rahos, abhibyakti maadhyam.ma euta had samma matra nihit rahanchha. Tyas pachhiko oodan abhibyaktiko afno srotko nabhai lakshyako hunchha jasto lagchha malai.

Jai Nepal
----tara ma na kangress ho na pulis.

ambhozzzz hau deep bro k ho hau, ach na padha bhane bhae halyo ni, padhdainam... esto lekhnu parcha kehi bujhe ta mari jaun ali ali chahi bujhe tara agadi ko kura bujhda pachadi ko birsine pachadi ko padhda agadi k thyo nai confuseddddddddd

deep bro arko taal chahi ali simple hai pheri radddiz huncha ni haui! :)

sitara jyu back ??lu party chaiyo!!!!!!! ;o) hehe

ani how was the trip?...trip ko story bhana nah ....nepal ko kura suuna tanna maan lageyko cha..:o)...so will look foward to checking out sajha from now on ;o)...
ani about the "English to Nepali to English" dictionary ..kina borrow....pass it to me...ni ;o)....permanently..im more of need of it than anyone hoina?hehe..and im broke..so def cant afford to buy it so..free pls ;o)..im sure u have a spare for urself...and even if u dun hehe...i never thought i needed one :o)...

deep dai ho ki bro ho taha payena..usko ta paadnu try garey..esp since its in roman nepali...but hyaaaa euta sentence ko meaning taha payena...nepe dai ko ta...nepali ma lekchan....just writing haru matrai admire gardai basey(bascha..):o)...kya spacing...kya commas haru and alignment..wah wah ;o)...alik if i knew the meaning of those words i would have made more effort to read them all..i do know me ka kha ga...but bit rusty...more or less than rusty bro not sure hehe..:oP...lu esto lame feeling mah chu lame joke pani diye hehe...duh im always lame hehe ;o)...

shaq bro are u sure u cant understand?hehe...i dun believe ni..ur the fastest roman nepali typer i seen..;o)...kasto phata phat...hehe...ani how was dinner today?u really took ur time hoina?must have been good ...or did u go for a night walk after dinner for digestion?ek lai ta hoina hola?hehe..:oP

la la ma gaye have fun eveyone..:o)...

sitara jyu i'll be looking foward for u post about nepal etc ;o)

laters..:o)

oops forgot to say...
im lookin foward for lekhaks bro post too ;o)...


cya..:o)

Lekhak, good good... I don't think it's good idea to talk about the knicks in this thread:P However, they got the deal: Craford.. He's young, talented, and worthy.