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Posted on 05-26-06 10:39 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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AS always..
my fictional work and any resemblence is unfortunate and coincidental only (O:
Pls. do not sue me for it.. its ur own.. misforture (O:

=============PART I=================
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DATE: (PRESENT DAY-1 day) i.e. YESTERDAY
Character: Prassana ( in Small town, somewhere in eastern US)
Arunima ( in Small town, somewhere in mid western US)
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Arunima:[ really mad @ the phone] why is he not picking up the phone? Three rings and where the hell is he? @ this time.[ time 11:00pm].

Prassana: (picks up the phone and answers in a lethargic tone) yello!!!!

Arunima: [ this time really mad @ Prassana ] kina yetti time lagayeko phone uthauna. What r u doing? where were u for last 2 weeks? ek choti ta phone garnu hunchha ni. exam chha bhandai ma testo ta garnu hunna ni. I had exams too................. [ It has been 2 weeks since they last spoke to each other. She has been dying to hear his voice. Is she really????]

Prassana: (gasps for some air) I was sleeping. Tired. I just finished with my projects today. Have not slept for last 4 days. I got home around 5pm and was sleeping. [ tries to justify in a mere hope that she would calm down]

Arunima: mero pani exam thiyo. I have been calling u for last 2 weeks daily and u do not respond my calls. U have my schedule and u call when I am not home. [ it seems like her voice is cracking. she is gonna cry]

Prassana: [ cuts her in the middle ] hey hey... i was not trying to avoid you okey.. anu.. baby listen.. i am coming there this weekend @ ur place. will u calm down please.

Arunima: (real mad .... her face is red as if she is gonna explode) u are coming here? why? why on earth you would want to come here? shouldn't u ask me before u make any decisions? who do u think I am?

Prassana: ( he could not believe what he just heard. he tried pinching himself just to make sure that he was not dreaming) ( his head was processing data like a super computer. looks like his neurons are going on a overload) i thought we were gonna b together. and we talked about this last month that i would come over there after the semester and u r gonna transfer here.

Arunima: i do not know which world r ya in. but i am not in ur world.

Prassana: ( begins to feel like the earth is slipping under his feet. all the traction keeping him standing are fading) anu, whats wrong? what's happenning? why r u so different? in last 2 minutes u turned 180 degrees......

Arunima: 180 degrees.. and me no way.. its u prassana not me... it is u. everything is about u u and u. u never think of me. I am hanging up the phone now. if u want u know my schedule u can call me tomorrow.

(she hangs up the phone. prassana was just listening to the beep of the phone as it fades away. his sleep has vanished. how could he go back to sleep after listening to such a yalp.) (Another restless night)

====END OF PART I ===================

==============PART II===============
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DATE: (PRESENT DAY - 2 YEARS) i.e. 2 years ago
LOCATION: American Embassay ko agadi, Kathmandu, Nepal
Character: Prassana
 Arunima
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Prassana: VISA ta payinchha hola. hami madhya kasaile VISA payena bhane kohi pani najane hunchha.

Arunima: hunchha. maile pani tehi bhanna lageko thiye. timle mero mukh bata sabda nikale ra laghdiyau. [ both of them had been student at Kathmandu University, Banepa. Prassana was an Engineering Major. While Arunima was in Business. Both spent their four years together... and of course its that friendship later flourished into "love" and promise to spend their life together. In another word, they have not been married but they acted like married couples. they were always together and were success story amongst friends. lot of couples splitted .. separated,..... remerged again to be separated but they never went through any real turmoil. no real ups or downs.. of course they had their share of fighting and nagging but nothing that rocked anything. looking at them they seemed like 2 puppies in love... cute cuddly couple meant for each other]

[ because of this inseperatabilty their relationship was no secret. their parents kind of gave in... their silent approval]

( it was prassana who was called in for his interview)

COUNSULAR: (stares @ prassana and then @ his I-20 and blurs) show me your transkript. (prassana hands the counsular his Bachelors Transcipt. after going through it he again blurts) u r qualified based on your education. But I still need to see your affadavit of support. How are you going to fund your education?

Prassana: I am being offered tuition remission. I need to pay for my room and board which is $8000/yr. For which my dad is going to pay. ( hands over bank statement to the counsular and ) here is my dad's bank statement verifying it.

COUNSULAR: congratulation. u can come after 3pm to pick up your passport with VISA.

( prassana was happy as a kid who has just been showered with lot of toys. He steps out of the embassy and waits for arunima to come out. he is already visualizing his way in between sky scrapers).
( after 5 minutes of wait. Arunima darts out of the embassy gate crying.. tears are flowing through her eyes. she was sobbing. prassana runs to her and grasps her in his arms and inquires. of course he could figure out that she was denied)

Prassana: anu, its okey sweety. its not the end of world. remember my promise. i am also not going to go. we will study here or go to india.

Arunima: (sobbing) no u should not give up this chance. I can try again next semester.

Prassana: no .. remember promise is promise and i will keep it. I will not go as well.

==END OF PART II======================


====== PART III =====================
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DATE: (PRESENT DAY) i.e. TODAY
Character: Prassana ( in Small town, somewhere in eastern US)
Arunima ( in Small town, somewhere in mid western US)
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(prassana has not slept the whole night. he has spent the better part tossing and turning thinking what did he do wrong. what he should do? its 7am and he gathers his strength to call arunima. she picks up the phone is next ring. she must be anticipating his call. )

Prassana: anu! how are you?

Arunima: (curtly) could not have been better. and u?

Prassana: (he could sense the hostility in her tone) i am fine I guess. i am going to come there this weekend; what do you think?

Arunima: what do i think? (now she started blasting) you already made ur decision and now u r asking what do I think? u know what I think its all over between u and me. so whether you come or go I care less.

Prassana: (shocked and bewildered) anu, r u all right? how can u say that? i thought we were gonna get married!

Arunima: (mockingly) get married with you... common.. u must be joking. what do u think? i could get no one better. Listen I am done talking to you. never call again and if you come. then you can take ur pictures and stuffs that i have... (she hangs up the phone)

Prassana: (could not believe what he just heard. 1 after another. he thought that she was just mad @ him. but no.. this is real. she is really going away from her. this very sense of her not being in his life.. started scaring him.. deep.. .. all of a sudden his body started to feel cold. he was totally agasped ... not a whisper came out from him.. but tears just kept falling as if it was a mansoon rain)
(this very idea of losing someone so close ... even the faintest hint of her walking away is shattering all his dreams and desires and sand castles.. built in his utopian world)..............

=====END OF PART III===================


===== PART IV ========
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DATE: (PRESENT DAY - 2 YEARS) i.e. 2 years ago
LOCATION: Prassana ko GHAR MA, somewhere in Kathmandu, Nepal
Character: Prassana
Arunima
Prassana's Dad and Mum
Arunima's Dad and Mum
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(everybody are in the living room trying to analyse and come to best solution. Prassana and Arunima both are only child. this makes them special and stubborn. both of their parents are trying to make the best out for their child.. at this moment)

Prassana's DAD: Prassana you can go now and Arunima can join you next semester.

Prassana: dad, hajur le k marji bha ko.. arunima le pheri VISA payena bhane k garne? what am i gonna do? 2-3 years..

Prassana's DAD: teso bhaye.. timi haru ko bihe gardinchhu. then u can take her probably as a dependent.

Arunima: i think we should not get married now. we are still young.

Prassana's MOM: arunima pani aahile bihe gare kura ma raji chhaina... tesaile tesh bare ma sochnu thik chhaina....

Prassana: ma chhai eklai jadai janna. aarko semester pheri sangai apply garaum la.

Arunima's DAD: teti bela pani arunima le VISA pauchhe bhanne gurantee ta chhaina ni. Aahile timi le VISA paayeko chhau u should go.

Arnunima: Prassana, u should go too. i will join u next semester if i get VISA. other wise I will wait for u here.

Prassana: But i made a promise... i will not go.

Arunima: It for our future and u should be realistic too.. yahan basera k hunchha.. jahile pani bandh.. nepal ko stithi testai ta ho ni.

once you are there then there are lot of ways. i will join u or wait for u.

==END OF PART IV==================


===== PART V =====================
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DATE: (PRESENT DAY) i.e. TODAY
Character: Prassana ( in Small town, somewhere in eastern US)
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prassana with his eyes glazed open still could not believe what he just heard over the phone. he was not mad @ arunima. Of course he got hurt being dumped over the phone from 7 years old relationship. but still he could not gather himself... he is certain in his mind that arunima is just angry. he would go to her place in alabama and soothe her and woo her over. he is confident and determined as ever that instead of the weekend he is gonna start his journey right @ this moment. while he walked towards his camry with his duffel. things started coming to his mind. he remembered the picture of another nepali guy she sent him like 2 months ago. she was so full of praise about him. he was so helpful and so on.......... no cannot be. his arunima is not like that. he started cursing himself for such a vain thought. he should not be even thinking about it.. how could it even come across his mind.. dyamnnnnn............................

 it was raining hard... so he flickers on the wiper and the head light and then starts driving south on I-95 .. he should take I-275 then over the tapanzee .. take I-84.. ........... he hopes to soothe and woo ARUNIMA.. when he gets to alabama..........
==THE END================== 

 
Posted on 05-26-06 10:58 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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khoi tah? what happens there? :) Really goood :))
 
Posted on 05-26-06 11:10 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Thapap....i like your idea......but i am sorry the story didn't make any sense to me...help me out here,will ya? Llet's see.....I have no idea why you keep going 2 years back.....It would have been significant if the guy had kept his promise and not come to US but i guess he didn't do it....Secondly, What's' up with the girl?At first, she is so desperate to talk to him and when he picks up the phone,she is pissed off....and why didn't the guy call her for the last two weeks...come on..if you really love someone, you don't make a lame excuse of having exams for not calling back..Looks like they both were not happy with the relationship....
If this is a fiction (like you said)then good try...I just think something is missing ( i don't know what)but if this is a true story then i am sorry that you're girlfriend dumped you..
 
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Thapap....i like your idea......but i am sorry the story didn't make any sense to me...help me out here,will ya? Llet's see.....I have no idea why you keep going 2 years back.....It would have been significant if the guy had kept his promise and not come to US but i guess he didn't do it....Secondly, What's' up with the girl?At first, she is so desperate to talk to him and when he picks up the phone,she is pissed off....and why didn't the guy call her for the last two weeks...come on..if you really love someone, you don't make a lame excuse of having exams for not calling back..Looks like they both were not happy with the relationship....
If this is a fiction (like you said)then good try...I just think something is missing ( i don't know what)but if this is a true story then i am sorry that you're girlfriend dumped you..
 
Posted on 05-26-06 11:12 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Sorry...sesssion expired bhandai thiyo ..dui tali po post gardechha.....
 
Posted on 05-26-06 11:22 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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BrilliantB......,
glad u liked it. Just wrote for you. (O: kya.. tyo beech ma k bhayo k bhayo.. IMAGINE.. and FILL IN THE REST.... okey for the story...

PAT,
here u go again .. insinuating too much. ITS NOT MY STORY.. Dyamn DUDE I write STORY ONCE A YEAR ... and every year ITS my STORY.. (O:

Ur questions are valid.. and LET ME SAY. PLS. FILL IN THE BLANK AND IMAGINE WHAT HAPPENED?

Obviously., SHE ALSO IS IN STATES? WHAT HAPPENED? WHEN DID SHE CAME? DID THEY COME TOGETHER ??? MAY BE NOT??? MAY BE??? WHY HE DID NOT CALL FOR 2 WEEKS??? EXAM AND SCHOOL JUST ENUFF TO OCCUPY HIM? MAY BE .. MAYBE NOT???
MAY BE HE DID NOT CALL BECAUSE HE knew something was wrong.. I DUNNO..
LET UR IMAGINATION RUN WILD (O:
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as always
what do i know (O:
 
Posted on 05-26-06 11:24 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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and Pat
BTW his excuse for NOT TALKING was EXAM. HE DID CALL HER BACK. Remember she said that "YOU HAVE MY SCHEDULE AND YOU CALL ME WHEN I AM NOT HOME!!!!" i am sure its there somewhere (O:

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Posted on 05-27-06 1:08 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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So you are saying to me that he was avoiding her ...of course he says he isn't ...but why the heck call when she is not around......
anyway...its about 2 am in the morning and for some reason i'm not feeling sleepy....SO why don't i run my imagination wild like you said and write what i think might happen....it was raining hard... so he flickers on the wiper and the head light and then starts driving south on I-95 .. he should take I-275 then over the tapanzee .. take I-84.. ........... he hopes to soothe and woo ARUNIMA.. when he gets to alabama..........
He is really upset with the situation and thinks that arunima is overreacting...but deep down in his heart he knows that he made a very big mistake by halting the contact between them.."It was just a stupid exam, I could have just called to say hi..what was the big deal" he thinks.He sees her smiling face staring at him through the mirror of his car...good old memories begins to flood in.....He always knew that looking back at the tears would make him laugh but he just realizes that looking back at the laughs makes him cry.....He then knew that arunima was the only girl he wanted to spend the rest of his life with and the single thought of losing her was as painful as being rock-bottomed form the top of the building to the concrete floor.....He hears a lond horn....he wakes form his memory and realizes that he is losing control of the car...his whole life begins to flash before his eyes.. and BAAAAAAAAMMMMMMMMMMMMMM.......he crashes right into an SUV parked in the street......He doesn't want to die right now...he just wants one chace from god to see arunima for one last time and tell her how much he loves her and cares about her......then he losses his consiousness....
Thanks to the 5-star crash safety ratings of his car he is still alive.......
he opens his eyes...there is a sick smell of hospital all over the place..he sees a group of people surrounding him....someone whispers" doctor, he is waking up"....On his right he sees a nurse hooking up some wire...then he suddenly hears someone call his name-Prasu...he knows who it is..he looks to his left and sees the women he thinks is the most beautiful girl in the whole world...his arunima.....tears begins to flow through his eyes...her eyes are already wet...she hugs him like it's the end of the world....she says she is sorry....he says he is sorry........
THE END
 
Posted on 05-27-06 1:14 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Pat,
there u go.. nice finishing touch....

and it is right.. .its 2 AM and i cannot sleep 2... (O:
 
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guess i too had 'felt' the car was gonna be in some kinda accident(shud focus on drivin..shudnt we?;oP hehe dun dream and drive?;oP hehe..plus the weather?and the rush?urghh :oS )..

but somehow...preferred another endin(had thot about pat's endin too ;o) hehe..similiar...very similiar.. ;o) hehe but in the end..the other endin just seemed to 'touch' me..and no!i aint charing it for molest!!yeah yeah lame!!!hehe...)..guess its the mood?..dark clouds are hoverin up above me :o|..yeah gloomy day :oS ...

anyways shant share the 'endin' i had in mind.. ..err..u know..pheri aucha kuyeko golbedas and aru shabji!(or juttas and chappals?):oS..well i do love me veges..and do seem to love footwears..but pls!save it for the needys!!hehe..

oops..meanderin again :oS..

thapap bro..nice ;o)...
but one thing i need to get some 'answer' from u...lamo naam cha..arunima..but choto ma chai..ANU re?got me thinkin there!!any 'explanation'?cos yeah name doesnt matter does it?hehe..but then again..any 'answer' from u would be nice..just curious :oD..nepali thingy ho?..i dunno anyone who has a named
arunima..so dunno if they are called Anu in short..care to part with and share some of ur 'knowledge' ;o) hehe..it be nice ..if there is any 'sensible' 'explanation'?hehe..wat is sensible?hehe..u wrote it..so u shud have smthin to say?hehe

have a good one..(sharin again soon?once a yr re?:oS hehe)

ps..i know u know about flip flops ;o)...more than me?;o)..yap wat do i know?:oS ;oP hehe..
 
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sorry to hear your girlfried dumped you thapap. we wish we could help and hey drive safe ;)
 
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Hehe ramro cha, aru ni lekha hai...noooooooo dont write hoina bahne feri yehi bhannu parcha.. :P oki catch you around. take care kitkat.
 
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ladyinred,
tanku (O:... so me kitkat.. huh... eat me dear (o:
 
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anon,
arunima is also nepali name.. but in short... anu is good.... hoina bhane "arun"... tyo ta keta naam huna po janchha


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Good read, dude.

Though Alabama is in the south, not midwestern US.

Unless this is a clue for a diabolical twist in the sequel. Maybe Arunima is already is the midwestern US sleeping with someone else. While the poor sap Prasanna is driving down to Alabama ......... dhyan tan tyan ....... [time for some dramatic hindi movie music].
 
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bewakuf, do u goto Metropolitan State university in MN ????
 
Posted on 05-27-06 2:44 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Good job ThapaP... I liked the story but your ending?? Come on.. atleast tell us if they get back together or not...
 


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